Feelings - Poem

Feelings - Poem

Postby Pauly » Tue Jun 07, 2011 8:47 am

Not my best, not my worst. Just emotions coming through words. Not aimed at anyone or anything. Just emotions I have, that I channeled into writing. This also makes for a good narrative in a fiction. Probably where I will use it. Please don't ask if I'm alright. I am. Just had the urge to write. I suppose I shall post more here in the way of fiction. Comments and feed back is always nice. Again, this isn't my best. Sorry for the lack of quality. Alliteration is poor and such. :|

Feelings

Where does it begin?

My life, the lies, truth with a view from faded eyes.

Where does it begin knowing your life is a sham?

Feeling pain and misery at the end of each daily mental exam.

Sitting in bed wondering, how can I call this who I am?

I am nothing like who I portray I am.

I am a man with no fans. Mixed up from who I supposedly am.

Conveying an image of lies.

Caught up in friendships that have no life.

Fallacies you imagine, realities I live; they’re one in the same.

Surrounded by the lines of failure, grazed by death one and again

This paper bag is invincible.





Feelings of solitude radiate from within.

It’s a sad life I’m livin’, hiding behind the veil.

I see no other way. I’m tired, beat, and wore down.

“You’re a young one son, get back on that horse and ride.”

Hard to ride a horse with a broken will that shows no life.



Stuck in a cage, no place to be going.

Random words and thoughts are now flowing.

You say my world is vibrant and full of life.

I ask you this, where is this world? I’m ready to start living.



I snap back from the thoughts of, lying, crying, shams, and personality scams,

I inhale deeply, banishing the rising feelings from within.

I ask myself where do I begin trying to correct the man I am?

It begins here.

I lay my head on my pillow,

Much rest is needed to force on that tainted smile again.
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Re: Feelings - Poem

Postby Musashi1596 » Tue Jun 07, 2011 12:28 pm

Good stuff.
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Re: Feelings - Poem

Postby Pauly » Tue Jun 07, 2011 4:08 pm

Thank you. I'm not that proud of it, then again I never am proud of the stuff I write. For being written at 4am, I'll take it.
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Re: Feelings - Poem

Postby GoD_GraveDancer » Wed Jun 08, 2011 1:34 am

Nice. Reminds me of Eminem
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Re: Feelings - Poem

Postby Pauly » Wed Jun 08, 2011 2:54 am

GoD_GraveDancer wrote:Nice. Reminds me of Eminem

Thank you. Was meant to be a slam poem. Any reference to reminding somebody of Eminem is a good thing. He is a great lyricist. Appreciate it. :)
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Re: Feelings - Poem

Postby krusteh » Wed Jun 08, 2011 11:55 am

Sounds very Sage Francis like in my head.
Very nice, great rapper.
watch this if you got the time.

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Re: Feelings - Poem

Postby Pauly » Wed Jun 08, 2011 4:15 pm

Sounds more like Slam Poetry with music added to it. I really enjoyed that. I see what you mean.
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